this is my work on open writing.
the whole class did this and this is my story with the characters.
i found this is because i read this kinds of stories all the time.
i think i need to work on shorter stories.
besides that i think it is pretty good.
see you guys later.
Hi John Henry I like how you put an extra bit of information at the beginning of your story next time I think you should add a title to your blog post.
ReplyDeleteSome people deserve Karma lol... I enjoyed the flow from beginning to the end. You were successful using the quotation mark/speech marks. Have a look at your use of commas. Are you over using it? let me know what you think.
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